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The second part of the retelling of Mysterious Acid by :iconogodei-khan: . Again, make sure give his one a read too: there wouldn't be an "Other" if there wasn't an original! Well, it looks like there's gonna be a part 3...better get on that.

I do not own Queen's Blade. The original Mysterious Acid concept was thought up by this guy: :iconogodei-khan:
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Very good. Nice resolution to the antidote problem and good efforts to create sensation in many instances, retaining the "franchise's" sensual appeal.

My only note would be on dialogue. You caught the voice of Slime!Cattleya very well, but her post-transformation lines seemed a bit off, and early on when Reina addresses her associates as "ladies," also didn't seem to go over well.

Minor points, of course, and the bulk of the dialogue did not feel out of place (and a good deal of it was very well-adapted). You captured characterization well and are keeping things dynamic. Good show.